lunch alarm

By admin, November 29, 2009 1:49 am

What do you think of this paragraph i wrote? ANY SUGGESTION to make it better?

OK so i have to make a paragraph that a moment is expanded, how can i make it better?

As I hear my morning alarm ring, thoughts start running through my head. Here goes another ordinary day of school. Here goes another few boring classes. Here goes another sweaty gym class. Here goes another unhealthy lunch. Here goes another pile of homework. All of a sudden I realize I should probably turn of the alarm and start the day.

As I hear my morning alarm ring thoughts start running through my head. (dropped the comma in that one)

Here goes another ordinary day of school, another few boring classes and another sweaty gym class. Here goes another unhealty lunch and another pile of homework. Suddenly I realize that I should probably turn off the alarm and start the day.

I hate the term “all of a sudden” Just a pet peeve.

Lunch alarm